Saturday, 13 June 2009

Editing Termion, post #5

*pants* Just spent a lot of the morning wrestling with chapter 3. It's done...for this round of edits. It need more changing because of this extra pov. I feel I'm making progress. I've cut quite a few words out, replacing them with more accurate (I hope) phrases. Some of the information, because it was a draft, was telling the reader instead of showing them. I needed to include Jinna's dislike of germs, and of being touched.

On reading, not all of the sentences sounded right for the character I'd originally put down for saying it. I swapped characters, or axed the sentence altogether.

I'm now happy having Tarc as the second pov. I hope his fatherly love for Jinna shines through.

Will tackle chapter 4 this evening. I need a break! Time for food, reading, interspersed with Japanese. (Yes, languages give my brain a break :D)

2 comments:

Danyelle said...

*throws sparkling confetti*

You can do this, Yuna! I'm proud of you. Editing isn't easy, but it's worth it. :D

Yunaleska said...

Much appreciated!